"Too not wither the plants you love." This word "Too" should be "to" here (as the meaning of "too" is used as "In addition". An example would be "I want to go too", which is exactly the same as "I want to go as well"), and this sentence should also have a question mark at the end of it. The other two lines afterwards should also have question marks at the end of them as well.
"Do you not with to become that?" The word "With" needs to be "wish" here.
"And if realized."
The word "If" needs to be changed to either "it" or "she" here. Technically, "She" would be the most accurate word to use in the English language (as "it" is used mainly in regards to inanimate objects, which is also in part why people get pissed when you refer to babies as "it" as well).
"○○○○" This section right here is funky as hell. It needs changed into something else. Anything else.
"Too not wither the plants you love." This word "Too" should be "to" here (as the meaning of "too" is used as "In addition". An example would be "I want to go too", which is exactly the same as "I want to go as well"), and this sentence should also have a question mark at the end of it. The other two lines afterwards should also have question marks at the end of them as well.
"Do you not with to become that?" The word "With" needs to be "wish" here.
"And if realized."
The word "If" needs to be changed to either "it" or "she" here. Technically, "She" would be the most accurate word to use in the English language (as "it" is used mainly in regards to inanimate objects, which is also in part why people get pissed when you refer to babies as "it" as well).
"○○○○" This section right here is funky as hell. It needs changed into something else. Anything else.
"○○-sama" Same issues as the "○○○○" section.
I think question marks are not needed because Elly is just listing the things that she could by changing.
"○○○○" and "○○-sama" are omitted on purpose.
Also, remember that you can change stuff yourself, especially obvious mistakes like those "too" and "with".
Darkagma said: Also, remember that you can change stuff yourself, especially obvious mistakes like those "too" and "with".
I'm not familiar enough with danbooru's system, and do not wish to fuck anything up by screwing around with things without actually knowing what I'm doing.
You're the mistress of the household, and we're your servants. That's why we can't be friends. However, ○○○○-sama... We can be a family. Is that all right?
The fairy nodded her head. The youkai smiled. And when she had realized...The youkai made her warm food, told stories until she slept at night, told her how to use her power, and became someone to play with.In that life, the fairy said thus.
"I don't want to go back outside, I want to be here with you forever. You're the friends I finally have.""But we can never be your friends."...the fairy was in a large mansion. The youkai spoke, "If I were to make a comparison, this would be your chrysalis, or cocoon.""To be able to control your great power."
"To be able to play with friends."And from then on, the fairy spent good time with the youkai.The fairy nodded.The youkai spoke
"Do you not wish to change?"
"To not wither the plants you love."Do you not wish to become that?The happy life she had been brought into was incomparable to the life she lived up to now.The youkai were all kind to her."This place is for you to be reborn into ◯◯◯◯."
"You can't go outside. Until your body is complete, the outside air is poison."And the youkai responded.
"◯◯-sama, those words make me very happy."
